Better+endings+For+the+Book

Hey Team Fletchville! Thank you for your better endings. They are all different as well which is refreshing to see since you all have your own opinion on how the novel could end. I ask that you now carefully provide feedback to your peers about minor corrections, use of quotations and writing tense. You are encouraged to stay with the same format in which the novel was written to ensure that smooth transistion. Tristan would be a good support for using quotations so please seek his advice. Tori, very good use of descriptive detail. I certainly get an emotional response when I read your ending. I can almost feel how Winnie feels! Tim, your use of short sentences is effective given the conversation. However, you need to carefully utilize punctuation in your writing. Keith, well done but please keep the same tense and person. (They, we, I etc.- you must be consitent.) Thanks everyone! I look forward to seeing your improvements on your work and I would like to hear more discussion as well. Thanks! Ms C:)

Hi everyone please post your better endings on this page with the date and who its by also a titttle etc

Tim's beter ending

Leon. Yes Brandon. Well I was just wondering do you ever miss your fokes. Well um hey we are at school. doesn’t time fly when your having fun huh. Later at school. Leon can you come to the office. Mr Sitter called over the pa system Leon looked at Brandon then shrugged his shoulders. Brandon thought to him self. Why is Leon going to the office he never gets in trouble. then it hit me. Did children aid find out about his secret. I had to know. so I got in trouble to be sent to the office. Well it turns out that Leon was sitting on the bunch with two other groined ups. Leon introduced them to me. This is my mom he said to pout to the gorgeous women beside him, this is my dad. He said point to the scruffy man to the other side of him

Tristan`s Better Ending. March 9, 2011-

Judge, " The Jury and I have made our decision. We have concluded that Leon, Winnie and Sam will be living with the Skeltons. By all means, I consider this case closed." The George and the Skelton family went silent. Brandon, Leon, Winnie, Sam, Ricky, Ricky`s mom, dad and brother were all shocked at this scary conclusion to the trial of the George Family Trial. After that trial, everything at Kingsville Elementary School whent silent after that horror of a week. Brandon, Leon, Winnie and Sam became the best of friends and found a new hideout instead of going to Ricky`s house everyday.

Tori's better ending, March 10th 2011

' BOOM !' the door crashed open to our apartment leaving dust filling the air all i saw was 3 largely built men approached Whinnie, Sam and Leon. I could see the fear in Sams eyes, and Whinnies eyes beginning to water Leon just stood there as the men started to get closer and closer. I was silently panicing because these wnert just any ordianary men coming into the house, these where men from childrens AID, the place that Leon, Sam and Whinnie feared most. The first man came up and grabbed Leons arm and started to pull him out of the apartment " RUN!" i shouted ! Whinnie and Sam attempted to make a break for it, racing up stairs, but the men just chased them. As Whinnie, Sam, and Leon stepped into the Bitter hands of thouse social workers, my world had just came crashing down beneath me. I could feel the adrenaline rushing threw my blood i knew i couldnt do anything more

Sam was the last to step into their black car he got in slowly but only got pushed into it more, once the car door slammed i had no idea that was going to be the last time i would ever see, Leon , Whinnie, and Sam Gorge

Keith's better ending

The door came crashing down, The men from Childrens Aid quickly grabbed the Georges family and took them to their car. They were all screaming at the top of their lungs " LET US OUT! " " STOP! " They were all yelling and screaming at each other on the way there. I had no idea when i would ever see them again. When they got to court the Judge said " I have decided your family shall be sent to a foster home. Case Closed! "

The next morning I woke up to a call from the foster home wondering who do i know that's at a foster home? I answered the phone " Hello? " " Hey Brandon its me Leon. " " LEON! " I shouted. " How are you? " " Its great over here you should come visit some time." " I'll come over right now! " " Great I'll be waiting at the door. "

I knew i'd see Leon again but not for a long time.